Tutor Feedback and Reflections



Formative feedback

Student name Joy Brodie Student number 515609
Course/Unit Photography 1: Expressing Your Vision Assignment number 2
Type of tutorial Written    



Overall Comments


You’ve approached the assignment in a very methodical and thoughtful way which has made it a good all round learning experience for you.


Assessment potential


I understand your aim is to go for the Photography/Creative Arts* Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, providing you commit yourself to the course, I believe you have the potential to pass at assessment.  In order to meet all the assessment criteria, there are certain areas you will need to focus on, which I will outline in my feedback.   



Feedback on assignment


You’ve met the brief and implemented some developments in your approach such as maintaining a format, not mixing colour and black and white.


The subjects were well chosen and composed and the great majority technically successful, apart from perhaps Photo 8 which ironically was your most creative intervention and worth persisting with. I would have been happy if the series had been made entirely of 10 attempts to throw leaves in the stream and the series was called, 10 attempts to throw leaves in the stream.


Amongst the photo enthusiast community ‘creativity’ is often associated with effects of one kind or another. That’s not the kind of creativity we’re dealing with here, we’re talking about conceptual creativity, the ideas behind making the images and the reasons for displaying them. Both of your references, Ansel Adams and Fay Godwin had sophisticated reasons for making their work, more than showing beauty. Adams for example was a pioneer in raising green consciousness.


Again amongst the enthusiast community there’s a convention to not interfere with the landscape and portray it as a beautiful perfection when that’s often far from the reality. The whole of the countryside has been husbanded as ultimately an economic resource.


Photographing in black and white moves the image and the argument to a cooler rationality, distancing it from the conventional idea of landscape as beautiful entertainment asking the viewer to engage rather than be passively entertained.


Intervening in the image, ‘breaking the fourth wall’, can perform the same function shooting in colour, disturbing the ‘perfection’. This then becomes the punctum.


You’ve got a good baseline of ability in landscape which you can build on in future work.


A word about the prints…


Coloured borders should be avoided; they interfere with the colour relationships in the actual image. The border acts as a reference colour and should always be white for a print and wider to allow the print to be picked up without touching the image surface; a minimum of 3.5cm so the finished print looks like this…



It’s more important to have the borders this wide in proportion to the image than it is to try and make the image as big as possible on the paper.


Formatted like that and presented in the clam shell portfolio will be perfect for assessment.


There’s no need to send prints to me in the box, an envelope is fine and saves wear and tear on the portfolio, keeping it in good order for the assessment when it’s important. By the way it’s like a box of expensive chocolates; the lid is the bigger half.




The course work is carefully executed, well done, carry on.




A good solid start on the Research and Reflection; you’ve got the idea, keep it up and do more.



Learning Log


The blog feels clean and airy, everything accessible and easily navigable. The only thing that needs addressing is being able to click through to larger versions of the assignment images.


Suggested reading/viewing


Continue with following up the research and reading references in the module notes.


Pointers for the next assignment / assessment


Read the brief through carefully a few times at different times.


Students sometimes place a rather bizarre interpretation on this assignment and produce work which doesn’t encapsulate the idea of a decisive moment or its inversion, the non-decisive moment; it’s more like avoiding the whole idea of the decisive moment and its conceptual antonym. As a consequence the images they present can be inconsequential and hence not very engaging in terms of content and narrative.


Take a look at this on the student discussion site…




Overall you’re progressing everything very well; take it to another level again on the next assignment.


Tutor name Clive White
Date 16/12/16
Next assignment due 16/02/17

I felt pleased with these comments.  The borders had been a mistake as I hadn’t realized when I sent them off for printing I had a wrong foreground colour – I’m not quite sure how to get the right size border but will need to try and work this out.


I was interested in the comments around black and white versus colour.  I do quite often use black and white in my landscape photos but due to the lovely autumn colours had left these in colour.

As I’m reflecting on these comments I have been working on the ‘Decisive Moment’ – I have struggled to get conceptual ideas/creativity for this next assignment and fully appreciate Clive’s comments that photos can seem inconsequential.  I did an initial attempt sitting on the Royal Mile in Edinburgh and discarded the whole lot as I felt bored looking at them.  I have now sent off a set to be printed from a shoot I did today but I’m not sure they’re at ‘another level’.


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